[maemo-community] Fw: Maemo community outreach flyer reboot - feedback solicited

[From: Andrew Flegg]

On Fri, Jan 22, 2010 at 14:35, Randall Arnold <texrat at ovi.com> wrote:
>[I wrote:]
>> On Thu, Jan 21, 2010 at 22:50, Randall Arnold <texrat at ovi.com> wrote:
>> >
>> > Link: http://maemo-daemons.org/maemo-org_community-flyer1_Maemo5.pdf
>>
>> 404 :-(
>
> Working here now-- may have been a temporary glitch.

Quim pointed out that the URL *shown* by your HTML email wasn't the
URL actually linked to. The one you linked to was:

    http://maemo-daemons.org/maemo-org_community-flyer1_Maemo5..pdf

Note the double full-stops. Now, who ever said the HTML email allowed
for better communication? ;-)

Concrete comments:
  * The slide on page 1 showing corporate/community lifecycle looks
    very heavy with the black background, and very "complicated" with
    all the edges between shapes.

  * The Mer logo on a wide black-stripe looks weird.

  * The "/community" next to maemo.org should be "/community/" (the
    trailing slash is important in URLs, and without it, this gives
    a 404).

  * The "/community" looks weird on a hard rectangular black
    background.

  * Some of the wordage on the front page seems a little over-eager,
    but perhaps this is just British cynicism and reticence.

  * Is a paragraph on the council (bottom of page 2) actually
    necessary?

HTH,

Andrew

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